On Tue, Jun 27, 2017 at 10:40:11PM -0700, Link Dupont wrote: > Hi everyone, > > I've got a first draft up for part 1 of the Backing up series. Please > read, follow and give me feedback. There are definitely areas that can > be improved. > > Also, I don't want to publish until all three articles are done. I need > to make sure that parts two and three (duply and deja-dup, > respectively) will work seamlessly with the backup created in part one. > This may mean significant edits to this part one. > > Please provide feedback! > > https://fedoramagazine.org/?p=17880&preview=true&preview_id=17880 The coverage of this article is absolutely spot-on. It's easy to follow and gives clear directions. I recommend you make a pass over it, though, and try to shorten and simplify sentences. A good rule of thumb is to minimize the use of the verb "to be," along with gerunds ("-ing" words). For example: FROM: "Backups are only as good as how often they are run. Backups need to be scheduled and run regularly in order to keep adding new data and pruning off old data." TO: "Backups only help if you run them often. Schedule and run them regularly to keep adding new data and prune off old data." This might seem nitpicky, but writing becomes stronger when you make sentences short, and use a declarative or commanding tone. Don't labor over it too long though! ;-) Do what you can and I'll be glad to help tune it later. -- Paul W. Frields http://paul.frields.org/ gpg fingerprint: 3DA6 A0AC 6D58 FEC4 0233 5906 ACDB C937 BD11 3717 http://redhat.com/ - - - - http://pfrields.fedorapeople.org/ The open source story continues to grow: http://opensource.com _______________________________________________ Fedora Magazine mailing list -- magazine@xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx To unsubscribe send an email to magazine-leave@xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx
